Post 8-Essay Revising

The essay I chose to review is my close-reading essay. I think this essay a low, maybe low-plus. It has the basics that every essay needs, but it lacks in many areas. I think that it doesn't flow as well as I could make it. It has choppy transitions and parts from paragraph to paragraph as well as relating some points to other points in the paragraphs. I can work more on using more quotes and utilizing the sources better. I think the paper lacks in the support area using resources, and it would help if I added more information to help support my argument. I need to work on unpacking the quotes as well, which would also help support my argument. Overall it has a purpose and is fairly organized, but I believe it needs to be reworked in terms of the transitions and I need to add supporting quotes and work on unpacking those quotes to get the most out of them.

Blog Prompt 7

Krakauer's self-expression strengthened McCandless's story. It impacted me more when he related himself to the story he was telling. It showed that he had some experience and knowledge about Chris' type of journey and that he wasn't writing it blindly. It seemed more purposeful and trustworthy because of his story. I feel that the story is more "legit" because of this as well. I believe that Krakauer supports himself in telling Chris' story by his own self-expression.